How Does She DO That???

Okay. I showed my editor what I'd done. She said I was still trying to cram too much information in my one-liner, and took a "stab" at it, and sent it to me.

It was damned near perfect. And she's only read the first and last sixty pages of the book--just under a third of the ms!

So of course I'm going to use it in my queries. I mean, she cut it down (way down) from what I'd written, so some of the words are mine, right? You know, I really hope this sort of thing comes with practice, because I was ready to tear out what little hair I have left over this.

I almost dread having to come up with a one-liner for Jahannan's Children.